Monday, July 8, 2013

Spoken Word


If you were to say something about the world what would it be?

Today Joshua Iosefo came to my literacy group and talked to us about spoken word. These are some of the things I learnt from him. Everyone's voice is valuable, there is absolutely no limit of writing and we are powerful.
This is some of the writing I have did during Joshua's time with us in class.


First of all Joshua had drawn something random on the board. We were to write about what we thought it was. He said it could be anything at all and so this is what I had wrote.
Scribble On The Board
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Random curving lines on the board.  Almost looking like a ribbon with a tiny hash-tag on the side of it.  He doesn't know what he was doing he just let his hand flow,  and the picture he draw actually turned out to be looking like SR#.  There must be a meaning for this!!!


Secondly we had to write about what we would like to tell the entire world. Something that is effecting us personally that we'd want the world to know about. 
Problems/ World  Peace
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A lot of people should start to look after the world. E.G stop littering and fighting and start worrying about the important problems all over the world. Problems are being caused and people are being killed/hurt. Everyone has feelings, 1 small word had hurt someone a lot.

Cinderella and the Beanstalk Narrative




In our literacy group we were given the task to remake a narrative about a traditional narrative. With the help of Mary L we finished with this piece of writing. Hope you enjoy!!


Once upon a time in a faraway land there lived a young woman named Cinderella. At the age of only 8  her mother died from a very rare sickness. Her father eventually got over Cinderella’s mum and married again. She was raised by her Father , King Mordred and her wicked old stepmother SANDYLINE. SANDYLINE had two daughters ABRID and RUBY. They were exactly like their mother, wicked, ugly, gold diggers, and most of all selfish and greedy.

One fine afternoon while Cinderella was doing her daily chores, she overheard ABRID and RUBY talking about the ball they got invited too. It was ABRID and RUBY’s dream to meet  the Prince Jack from “The kingdom of Skies”. Cinderella didn’t really care about Prince Jack because she thought he was just another poshed up boy from another rich kingdom from far away.  


Anyways as usual she had to go to the village markets to collect food for her lazy sisters to eat. While she was there she bumped into a boy. “ OMG, can’t you open your eyes!” yelled Cinderella. “Open yours, you blind LADY” replied the boy. They both looked at each other for a while and apologized and introduced themselves properly. Cinderella had no idea that it was Prince Jack. She had just yelled at him and was totally embarrassed when she found out it was him.

While Jack and Cinderella were having a romantic picnic ABRID and RUBY catched them. With jealously and anger they took a false report back to their mother. Arriving at home CINDERELLA was blasted by SANDYLINE and was sent to be punished in the dungeon. Worn out and hopeless Cinderella sat there trying to figure out how to get help. Suddenly a Flash of glitter appeared in front of her.

“Hello my dear, I am your god mother sent from above. I have come to rescue your poor soul and provide want you shall need” said Fiona to Cinderella.  Escaping out of the dungeon of doom Cinderella ran up stairs to find SANDYLINE standing there. “Where are you going young lady” yelled Sandyline, “You can’t tell me what to do, I have been obeying you, accepting all your commands and especially keeping up with you. I am absolutely sorry but I have to leave”.


As everyday passes by SANDYLINE is filled with guilt and disappointment of the way she treated her daughter in law. She was then diagnosed with depression because she regretted never treating  Cinderella as her own.  ABRID and RUBY were sent to the dungeon for all the problems they caused as years passed along with their mother. As for Cinderella and Prince Jack they had children and got married, and lived happy ever AFTER!!