It was a cold, dark, gloomy night. I stumbled upon an abandoned hut deep in the heart of the forest. I was just about to enter the hut, when suddenly I heard a loud but shocking disturbing THUMB coming from it. Slowly entering a hut I saw a huge shadow coming closer and closer.
As I looked in the reflection of the hut window, I saw nothing. I was really scared and had no idea on what to really do. Creeping up to the hut door, the mysterious thing started to chase after me. At first I thought I was just hearing things but the next thing I knew I was running for my life!
As fast as I could I locked myself in my car and tryed to drive away. Then suddenly as I twisted the car key the whole car just shut down. Scared and frightened I made sure that all the car doors and windows were locked. Looking around through the cold frosted windows there was no one or thing in sight except for forest trees. As I looked in the distance I saw a beaming light, so while I was sitting in the cold car I made a plan on how to escape.
Finished with my plan, I unlock the door. As I was trying to creep away, then as I took my first step I hear a big thumb, and heavily breathing more like there was someone else there. Trying to walk as fast as I could to the the light, as I got closer and closer there was much more light. I tried to figure out what the heck it was. Crawling to the light I peeked my head over the bushes and looked into the distance.
As loud as I possibly could I screamed “help help”. I thought it was a village of people coming to rescue me but it wasn't. IT WAS A VILLAGE ON FIRE that had just been destroyed the night before. Running to my car I tried to get it started, and with my luck it did. As fast as I could I drove into the distance, and as far away from that hut as possible. THE END!! “AND thats why kids, you never go into the forest or anywhere alone, because why”. The kids replied “ You never know what's out there”
Wow Jorja that is a lot of writing there. I liked how you used lots of adjectives and describing words. I wish I could have the ability you have to be able to writing amazing story's like you. Keep it up
ReplyDeleteSincerely - Zheiyna
Kia ora Jorja
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness... I'd be terrified of a shocking, disturbing THUMB too :)
Check your spelling young lady, mistakes can really throw your audience.
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Hey Jorja, what an amazing story. While I was reading it i felt the intensity growing. Was the word THUMB meant to be thump?? Anyways nice story it was really awesome. Keep up the good work.
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